Term 4 Written Language

WALT write a character description of a person we know very well.

We know we have achieved this when we …

-    have written about the person’s physical appearance (the way they look).

-    have written about the person’s behaviour (how they speak or act).

-    have written about how they affect other people (what do they do to make you notice them).

-    have written about the person’s environment and belongings.

-    used descriptive words to make a picture in the mind of the reader

Granny by Siobhan Kenna

My granny is old and has wrinkles. She always has a smile on her face and also wears red lipstick. She always wears bright colours and a hat with a feather. Her hair is about the colour of sheep’s wool. My granny loves visitors, especially me. When she goes out she always wears her earrings. My granny has a two-storey house and lives with her son Kevin. She has a kind heart. My granny lives on a hill and near the beach. My granny wears a dress that goes with her feather and shoes. My granny has a small garden that has a path in the middle and plants around the outside. It also has a bird feeder. She has blue eyes like the colour of water. I have the best granny.

Feedback:

You have used some good similes and some adjectives in your description to create that picture about your granny but I still need to know a little more about what she looks like.

Next steps:

1.    Try to organise your description into paragraphs – what she physically looks like, about her personality/behaviour, and about her environment/belongings.

2.   Try to start as many sentences with different words as you can.